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Improving Paragraphs

Directions:
The following passage is an early draft of an essay. Some parts of the passage need to be rewritten. Read the passage and select the best answer for the question that follows. In making your decision, follow the conventions of standard written English. (Typical essays are approximately 225 words.)

Passage:

(1) Every year we hear more and more people complaining about the extended commercialism of the winter holiday season. (2) Every year stores put out decorations and holiday merchandise earlier and earlier. (3) Yet every year retailers complain that sales are not what they should be. (4) When will retailers learn? (5) The public knows how to keep its own schedule. (6) When we do not buy holiday gifts far in advance, shoppers are saying that they do not want to think about the winter holidays too early.

Question: which of the following is the best version of the underlined portion of sentence 6 (reproduced below) ?

When we do not buy holiday gifts far in advance, shoppers are saying that they do not want to think about the winter holidays too early.

(A)  When we do not buy holiday gifts far in advance, shoppers

(B)  When shoppers do not buy holiday gifts far in advance, they

(C)  In fact, shoppers' holiday gifts are not bought far in advance; they

(D)  Consequently, by our not buying these far in advance, shoppers

(E)  In contrast, when we do not do so, it is because shoppers